Hawk's Legend
The Earth all but destroyed, civilization in ruins, one man lives to rebuild it. His mind wrought with sadness, he has learned to become cold and deadly. He saves the life of a beautiful woman. But she is a deadly warrior seeking revenge for the death of her father. Thrown together by fate, they form what at first is an uneasy friendship. But fate has more in store for them than they could have imagined. Could this woman who swore no man would ever touch her again, find happiness in the arms of a man that doesn't age? A man with no soul?
If you like action and adventure you’ll enjoy much of this book, but you may struggle with the romance/love story elements. It is not easy to combine gritty action with a credible love story, and unfortunately this is the big downfall for Hawks Legend. If the love story were better written, and with some editing in places, I think that this book would deserve a higher rating. Full book review here.
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Hawk's Legend
I truly enjoyed this story and became very involved at the end. I felt it was well written and I hope all enjoy it as I did. Thank you for the wonderfu ride.
excellent!!
excellent!!
nice one
nice read
Writing style
I only have a few suggestions for your writing style, but I will elaborate, if I may.
1. Don't be afraid to use a thesaurus. Use big words when possible, or even words better than 'well' and 'really well', and add some adjectives to things like 'the girl and 'the man'. ex: 'the angry girl', 'the concerned man'.
2. Be realistic (not in a bad way :). The problem I see in a lot of writers is that they don't actually think about what it would be like to kill 'one after the other' of anything. It takes great skill and hardness of heart to kill them, and it also takes equal strength. ex: a really big, buff, warrior could probably take two men, or 'mutes, at the same time, but (and as a girl, I am unashamed to say) a girl could probably only handle one, either because she is too small to see both at once, or she doesn't have the strength of the buff guy. Let's face it; any girl will never have the strength of some huge guy. But it is very likely that she will be faster. Use this to your advantage. Use moves that make her not need to use strength, such as circling behind to slash a throat (which she's fast enough to do). When it comes to fighting, make the numbers as even as possible. One guy can't kill twenty, or even ten of anything at once. But I've touched on this before, so I'll stop here.
Dear me, now I've rambled on so. I hope this advice helps you (I never ever mean to put anyone down, I am just trying to help) if you are still writing books and thank you for the excellent read :D
You brought up some valid
You brought up some valid points, thanks.
As far as the killing twenty men, lol, if you read the story carefully all the way through, you'd see Hawk has more than a few advantages at his disposal mentioned in various places.. Like a sword that can hew its way through a 6x 12 inch bench with one swing, could easily cause the departure of several 'mutes' at a time or several by moving through a scattered group quickly.
I have to disagree with the woman thing, sure she might lack some of the strength and height, again if you noticed she was raised to be a warrior of sorts and handles a sword expertly. Thus her vulnerabilities scattered throughout. (mainly her repressed and under developed emotions which cause her to make mistakes)
I'm glad you liked the story, after the trilogy the most of my works have been books of three shorter si-fi works (usually 2 novella and 1 short)
Good one
Good one